diff --git a/GPL-Business/gpl-business.tex b/GPL-Business/gpl-business.tex
index 46bbacc3337dcf72b91898176ecdeffab012c315..2266e6016bdf1831be1ee03ef868e8d6da29c760 100644
--- a/GPL-Business/gpl-business.tex
+++ b/GPL-Business/gpl-business.tex
@@ -219,14 +219,15 @@ and the ability to build the binary applications from that source, the
 freedom cannot be properly exercised.
 
 Programmers can take direct benefit from this freedom, and often do.
-However, this freedom is essential to users who are not programmers.
-Users must have the right to engage in a non-commercial environment of
-finding help with the software (as often happens on email lists and in
-users groups).  This means they must have the freedom to recruit
+However, this freedom is also important to users who are not programmers.
+Users must have the right to exercise this freedom indirectly in both
+commercial and non-commercial settings.  For example, users often seek
+non-commercial help with the software on email lists and in users groups.
+When they find such help, they must have the freedom to recruit
 programmers who might altruistically assist them to modify their software.
 
-The commercial exercise of this freedom is also essential.  Each user, or
-group of users, must have the right to hire anyone they wish in a
+The commercial exercise of this freedom is also essential for users.  Each
+user, or group of users, must have the right to hire anyone they wish in a
 competitive free market to modify and change the software.  This means
 that companies have a right to hire anyone they wish to modify their Free
 Software.  Additionally, such companies may contract with other companies
@@ -259,6 +260,10 @@ distribution.  For example, a distribution vendor may provide immediate
 security and upgrade distribution via a special network service.  Such
 distribution is completely permitted for Free Software.
 
+(Section~\ref{Business Models} of this tutorial talks in detail about
+various Free Software business models that take advantage of the freedom
+to share commercially.)
+
 \subsection{The Freedom to Share Improvements}
 
 The freedom to modify and improve is somewhat empty without the freedom to
@@ -282,19 +287,19 @@ right to modify and improve the software for the customer to correct any
 problems that are beyond mere user error.
 
 Entities must also be permitted to make available modified versions of
-Free Software.  Most Free Software programs have a so-called ``canonical
-version'' that is made available from the primary developers of the
-software.  However, all who have the software have the ``freedom to fork''
---- that is, make available non-trivial modified versions of the software
-on a permanent or semi-permanent basis.  Such freedom is central to
-vibrant developer and user interaction.
+Free Software.  Most Free Software programs have a ``standard version''
+that is made available from the primary developers of the software.
+However, all who have the software have the ``freedom to fork'' --- that
+is, make available non-trivial modified versions of the software on a
+permanent or semi-permanent basis.  Such freedom is central to vibrant
+developer and user interaction.
 
 Companies and individuals have the right to make true value-added versions
 of Free Software.  They may use freedom to share improvements to
 distribute distinct versions of Free Software with different functionality
 and features.  Furthermore, this freedom can be exercised to serve a
 disenfranchised subset of the user community.  If the developers of the
-canonical version refuse to serve the needs of some of the software's
+standard version refuse to serve the needs of some of the software's
 users, other entities have the right to create long- or short-lived fork
 that serves that sub-community.
 
@@ -308,32 +313,34 @@ addresses how software can be non-free in the first place.
 Software can be made proprietary only because it is governed by copyright
 law\footnote{This statement is a bit of an oversimplification.  Patents
   and trade secrets can cover software and make it effectively non-free,
-  and one can contract away their rights and freedoms regarding software.
-  However, the primary control mechanism for software is copyright.}.
-Copyright law, with respect to software governs copying, modifying, and
-redistributing that software\footnote{Copyright law in general also
-  governs ``public performance'' of copyrighted works.  There is no
-  generally agreed definition for public performance of software and
-  version 2 of the GPL does not govern public performance.}.  By law, the
-copyright holder (aka the author) of the work controls how others may copy,
-modify and/or distribute the work.  For proprietary software, these
-controls are used to prohibit these activities.  In addition, proprietary
-software distributors further impede modification in a practical sense by
-distributing only binary code and keeping the source code of the software
-secret.
+  one can contract away their rights and freedoms regarding software, or
+  source code can be practically obscured in binary-only distribution
+  without reliance on any legal system.  However, the primary control
+  mechanism for software is copyright.}.  Copyright law, with respect to
+software governs copying, modifying, and redistributing that
+software\footnote{Copyright law in general also governs ``public
+  performance'' of copyrighted works.  There is no generally agreed
+  definition for public performance of software and version 2 of the GPL
+  does not govern public performance.}.  By law, the copyright holder (aka
+the author) of the work controls how others may copy, modify and/or
+distribute the work.  For proprietary software, these controls are used to
+prohibit these activities.  In addition, proprietary software distributors
+further impede modification in a practical sense by distributing only
+binary code and keeping the source code of the software secret.
 
 Copyright law is a construction.  In the USA, the Constitution permits,
 but does not require, the creation of copyright law as federal
-legislation.  Software, since it is tangible expression of an idea, is
+legislation.  Software, since it is an idea fixed in a tangible medium, is
 thus covered by the statues, and is copyrighted by default.
 
-However, software, in its natural state without copyright, is Free
-Software.  In an imaginary world, which has no copyright, the rules would
-be different.  In this world, when you received a copy of a program's
-source code, there would be no default legal system to restrict you from
-sharing it with others, making modifications, or redistributing those
-modified versions\footnote{There could still exist legal systems, like our
-  modern patent system, which could restrict the software in other ways.}.
+However, this legal construction is not necessarily natural.  Software, in
+its natural state without copyright, is Free Software.  In an imaginary
+world, which has no copyright, the rules would be different.  In this
+world, when you received a copy of a program's source code, there would be
+no default legal system to restrict you from sharing it with others,
+making modifications, or redistributing those modified
+versions\footnote{There could still exist legal systems, like our modern
+  patent system, which could restrict the software in other ways.}.
 
 Software in the real world is copyrighted by default, and that default
 legal system does exist.  However, it is possible to move software out of
@@ -347,7 +354,7 @@ copyright is in the ``public domain''.
 An author can create public domain software by disclaiming all copyright
 interest on the work.  In the USA and other countries that have signed the
 Berne convention on copyright, software is copyrighted automatically by
-the author when (s)he ``fixes the software into a tangible medium''.  In
+the author when she ``fixes the software into a tangible medium''.  In
 the software world, this usually means typing the source code of the
 software into a file.
 
@@ -366,7 +373,6 @@ expressed permission to take actions governed by copyright law.
 
 By contrast, what the copyright holder has done is renounce her copyright
 controls on the work.  The law gave her controls over the work, and she
-%should the ``she'' be a ``(s)he'' ?
 has chosen to waive those controls.  Software in the public domain is
 absent copyright and absent a license.  The software freedoms discussed in
 Section~\ref{Free Software Definition} are all granted because there is no
@@ -383,7 +389,7 @@ copyrighted.  In most cases (particularly in that of FSF and the GNU
 Project), this was done due to very careful planning.
 
 Software released into the public domain does grant freedom to those users
-who receive the canonical versions on which the original author disclaimed
+who receive the standard versions on which the original author disclaimed
 copyright.  However, since the work is not copyrighted, any non-trivial
 modification made to the work is fully copyrightable.
 
@@ -393,9 +399,9 @@ public domain as well.  However, over time, some entities will choose to
 proprietarize their modified versions.  The public domain body of software
 feeds the proprietary software.  The public commons disappears, because
 fewer and fewer entities have an incentive to contribute back to the
-commons, since they know that any of their competitors can proprietarize
-their enhancements.  Over time, almost no interesting work is left in the
-public domain, because nearly all new work is done by proprietarization.
+commons.  They know that any of their competitors can proprietarize their
+enhancements.  Over time, almost no interesting work is left in the public
+domain, because nearly all new work is done by proprietarization.
 
 A legal mechanism is needed to redress this problem.  FSF was in fact
 originally created primarily as a legal entity to defend software freedom,
@@ -473,7 +479,7 @@ The non-commercial users, however, were not concerned when these two
 fellows began collecting paychecks off of their GPL'ed work.  They knew
 that because of the nature of the GPL that improvements that were
 distributed in the commercial environment could easily be folded back into
-the canonical version.  Companies are not permitted to proprietarize
+the standard version.  Companies are not permitted to proprietarize
 Samba, so the non-commercial users, and even other commercial users are
 safe in the knowledge that the software freedom ensured by GPL will remain
 protected.
@@ -482,7 +488,7 @@ Commercial developers also work in concert with non-commercial developers.
 Those two now-long-since graduated students continue to contribute to
 Samba altruistically, but also get work doing it.  Priorities change when a
 client is in the mix, but all the code is contributed back to the
-canonical version.  Meanwhile, many other individuals have gotten involved
+standard version.  Meanwhile, many other individuals have gotten involved
 non-commercially as developers, because they want to ``cut their teeth on
 Free Software'' or because the problems interest them.  When they get good
 at it, perhaps they will move on to another project or perhaps they will
@@ -566,9 +572,9 @@ remain free in just this sense.\footnote{This quotation is Copyright
 \end{quotation}
 
 In essence, lawyers are paid to service the shared commons of legal
-infrastructure.  Few defend themselves in court or write their own briefs
-(even though they are legally permitted to do so) because everyone would
-prefer to have an expert do that job.
+infrastructure.  Few citizens defend themselves in court or write their
+own briefs (even though they are legally permitted to do so) because
+everyone would prefer to have an expert do that job.
 
 The Free Software economy is a market that is ripe for experts.  It
 functions similarly to other well established professional fields like the
@@ -663,9 +669,10 @@ Preservation of copyright notice and license notifications are mentioned
 specifically in \S 1.  These are in some ways the most important part of
 the redistribution, which is why they are mentioned by name.  The GPL
 always strives to make it abundantly clear to anyone who receives the
-software what its license is.  The goal is to leave no reason that someone
-would be surprised that the software she got was licensed under GPL\@.
-Thus throughout the GPL, there are specific reference to the importance of
+software what its license is.  The goal is to make sure users know their
+rights and freedoms under GPL and to leave no reason that someone would be
+surprised that the software she got was licensed under GPL\@.  Thus
+throughout the GPL, there are specific reference to the importance of
 notifying others down the distribution chain that they have rights under
 GPL.
 
@@ -688,36 +695,30 @@ on making a profit from Free Software redistribution.)
 
 \section{GPL \S 2: Share and Share Alike}
 
-Many consider \S 2 the heart and soul of the GPL\@.  For many, this is
-where the ``magic'' happens that defends software freedom along the
-distribution chain.  I certainly agree that if the GPL has a soul, this is
-where it is.  However, I argue that the heart is in fact contained in \SS
-4--5 (see Section~\ref{GPLs4} and~\ref{GPLs5} of this tutorial).  But, for
-the moment, let us consider the soul.
-
-\S 2 gives the only permission in the GPL that governs the modification
-controls of copyright law.  If someone modifies a GPL'ed program, she is
-bound in the making those changes by \S 2.  The goal here is to ensure
-that the body of GPL'ed software, as it continues and develops, remains
-Free as in freedom.
+For many, this is where the ``magic'' happens that defends software
+freedom along the distribution chain.  \S 2 is the only place in the GPL
+that governs the modification controls of copyright law.  If someone
+modifies a GPL'ed program, she is bound in the making those changes by \S
+2.  The goal here is to ensure that the body of GPL'ed software, as it
+continues and develops, remains Free as in freedom.
 
 To achieve that goal, \S 2 first sets forth that the rights of
 redistribution modified versions are the same as those for verbatim
 copying, as presented in \S 1.  Therefore, the details of charging,
-keeping copyright notices in tact, and other \S 1 provisions are in tact
+keeping copyright notices intact, and other \S 1 provisions are in tact
 here as well.  However, there are three additional requirements.
 
 The first (\S 2(a)) requires that modified files carry ``prominent
 notices'' explaining what changes were made and the date of such changes.
 The goal here is not to put forward some specific way of marking changes,
 or controlling the process of how changes get made.  Primarily, \S 2(a)
-seeks to ensure that those receiving modified versions what path it took
-to them.  For some users, it is important to know that they are using the
-canonical version of program, because while there are many advantages to
-using a fork, there are a few disadvantages.  Users should be informed the
-historical context of the software version they use, so that they can make
-proper support choices.  Finally, \S 2(a) serves an academic purpose ---
-ensuring that future developers can use a diachronic approach to
+seeks to ensure that those receiving modified versions know what path it
+took to them.  For some users, it is important to know that they are using
+the standard version of program, because while there are many advantages
+to using a fork, there are a few disadvantages.  Users should be informed
+the historical context of the software version they use, so that they can
+make proper support choices.  Finally, \S 2(a) serves an academic purpose
+--- ensuring that future developers can use a diachronic approach to
 understand the software.
 
 \medskip
@@ -734,12 +735,12 @@ education efforts by FSF on this matter, many still believe that modifiers
 of GPL'ed software are required by the license to publish or otherwise
 share their changes.  On the contrary, \S 2(b) {\bf does not apply if} the
 changes are never distributed.  Indeed, the freedom to make private,
-personal changes to software that are not shared should be protected and
-defended\footnote{FSF does maintain that there is an {\bf ethical}
-  obligation to redistribute changes that are generally useful, and often
-  encourages companies and individuals to do so.  However, there is a
-  clear distinction between what one {\bf ought} to do and what one {\bf
-    must} do.}.
+personal, unshared changes to software for personal use only should be
+protected and defended\footnote{FSF does maintain that there is an {\bf
+    ethical} obligation to redistribute changes that are generally useful,
+  and often encourages companies and individuals to do so.  However, there
+  is a clear distinction between what one {\bf ought} to do and what one
+  {\bf must} do.}.
 
 Next, we again encounter the same matter that appears in \S 0, in the
 following text:
@@ -767,12 +768,12 @@ Consider each subpart carefully.
 The work ``as a whole'' is what is to be licensed.  This is an important
 point that \S 2 spends an entire paragraph explaining; thus this phrase is
 worthy of a lengthy discussion here.  As a programmer modifies a software
-program, she generates new copyrighted material --- fixing ideas in the
-tangible medium of electronic file storage.  That programmer is indeed the
-copyright holder of those new changes.  However, those changes are part
-and parcel to the original worked distributed to the programmer under
-GPL\@.  Thus, the license of the original work affects the license of the
-new whole derivative work.
+program, she generates new copyrighted material --- fixing expressions of
+ideas into the tangible medium of electronic file storage.  That
+programmer is indeed the copyright holder of those new changes.  However,
+those changes are part and parcel to the original worked distributed to
+the programmer under GPL\@.  Thus, the license of the original work
+affects the license of the new whole derivative work.
 
 % {\cal I}
 \newcommand{\gplusi}{$\mathcal{G\!\!+\!\!I}$}
@@ -782,10 +783,10 @@ new whole derivative work.
 It is certainly possible to take an existing independent work (called
 \worki{}) and combine it with a GPL'ed program (called \workg{}).  The
 license of \worki{}, when it is distributed as a separate and independent
-work, remains the prerogative of the copyright holder of .  However, when
-\worki{} is combined with \workg{}, it produces a new work that is the
-combination of the two (called \gplusi{}).  The copyright of this
-derivative work, \gplusi{}, is jointly held by the original copyright
+work, remains the prerogative of the copyright holder of \worki{}.
+However, when \worki{} is combined with \workg{}, it produces a new work
+that is the combination of the two (called \gplusi{}).  The copyright of
+this derivative work, \gplusi{}, is jointly held by the original copyright
 holder of each of the two works.
 
 In this case, \S 2 lays out the terms by which \gplusi{} may be
@@ -798,7 +799,7 @@ product --- would they give you permission to create and distribute
 GPL, sets forth ahead of time options for the copyright holder of \worki{}
 who may want to create and distribute \gplusi{}.  This pre-granted
 permission to create and distribute derivative works, provided the terms
-of GPL are uphold, goes far above and beyond the permissions that one
+of GPL are upheld, goes far above and beyond the permissions that one
 would get with a typical work not covered by a copyleft license.  Thus, to
 say that this restriction is any way unreasonable is simply ludicrous.
 
@@ -824,11 +825,11 @@ third parties''.  This too has led to some confusions, and feeds the
 misconception mentioned earlier --- that all modified versions must made
 available to the public at large.  However, the text here does not say
 that.  Instead, it says that the licensing under terms of the GPL must
-extend to anyone who might, through the typical distribution chain,
-receive a copy of the software.  Distribution to all third parties is not
-mandated here, but \S 2(b) does require redistributors to license the
-derivative works in a way that is extends FIXME to all third parties who may
-ultimately receive a copy of the software.
+extend to anyone who might, through the distribution chain, receive a copy
+of the software.  Distribution to all third parties is not mandated here,
+but \S 2(b) does require redistributors to license the derivative works in
+a way that is extends to all third parties who may ultimately receive a
+copy of the software.
 
 In summary, \S 2(b) says what terms under which the third parties must
 receive this no-charge license.  Namely, they receive it ``under the terms
@@ -1211,9 +1212,23 @@ Thus, \S 7 is rarely gives software death by stopping its distribution.
 Instead, it is inspiring patent holders to share their patents in the same
 freedom-defending way that they share their copyrighted works.
 
-\section{GPL \S 8: Finding Freedonia}
+\section{GPL \S 8: Excluding Unfreedonia}
 \label{GPLs8}
 
+\S 8 is rarely used by copyright holders.  Its intention is that, if
+particular country, say Unfreedonia, grant particular patents or allow
+copyrighted interfaces (no country to our knowledge even permits those
+yet), that the GPL'ed software can continue in free and unabated
+distribution in the countries where such controls do not exist.
+
+It is a partial ``out'' from \S 7.  Without \S 8, if a copyright holder
+knew of a patent in a particular country licensed in a GPL-incompatible
+way, then she could not distribute under GPL, because the work would
+legitimately end up in the hands of citizens of Unfreedonia.
+
+It is an inevitable but sad reality that some countries are freer than
+others.  \S 8 exists to permit distribution on those countries that are
+free without otherwise negating parts of the license.
 
 %%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%%
 \chapter{Odds, Ends, and Absolutely No Warranty}
