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@@ -373,26 +373,26 @@ automatically by the author when she ``fixes the software into a tangible
 medium.''  In the software world, this usually means typing the source code
 of the software into a file.
 
-Imagine if an author can truly disclaim that default control given to her by the
-copyright laws. Once this is done, the software is in the public domain
---- it is no longer covered by copyright. Since it is copyright law that
-allows for various controls on software (i.e., prohibition of copying,
-modification, and redistribution), removing the software from the
-copyright system and placing it into the public domain does yield Free
-Software.
+Imagine if authors could truly disclaim those default control of copyright
+law.  If so, the software is in the public domain -- no longer covered by
+copyright.  Since copyright law is the construction allowing for most
+restrictions on software (i.e., prohibition of copying, modification, and
+redistribution), removing the software from the copyright system usually
+yields software freedom for its users.
 
 Carefully note that software in the public domain is \emph{not} licensed
 in any way. It is nonsensical to say software is ``licensed for the
 public domain,'' or any phrase that implies the copyright holder gave
 expressed permission to take actions governed by copyright law.
 
-By contrast, what the copyright holder has done is renounce her copyright
-controls on the work. The law gave her controls over the work, and she
-has chosen to waive those controls. Software in the public domain is
-absent copyright and absent a license. The software freedoms discussed in
+By contrast, the copyright holders instead renounced copyright controls on
+the work.  The law gave the copyright holder exclusive controls over the
+work, and they chose to waive those controls.  Software in the public domain
+is absent copyright and absent a license. The software freedoms discussed in
 Section~\ref{Free Software Definition} are all granted because there is no
 legal system in play to take them away.
 
+
 \subsection{Why Copyright Free Software?}
 
 If simply disclaiming copyright on software yields Free Software, then it